ext_29712 ([identity profile] postingwhore.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] aleathiel 2004-03-19 08:20 am (UTC)

This is stunning. However, a few minor gripes.

gold casket
Wouldn't it be an urn? I recall something of the sort from all the reference sites I've been to.

Hector’s gleaming hair dull and foul with the dirt and filth of the battlefield
If this is an Iliad fic, which it indeed seems to be, Hector would not be sullied. Canon says that Apollo protected Hector from becoming dirty when Achilles dragged his corpse around the grave of Patroclus.

But overall, absolutely beautiful.

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